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Find me sunken into the
lotus field, bathing skin silvergreen,
waist-deep and pink

in sunset, and we will cry:
for three-faced elephants,
for rain,

for the dancers threading grace
between their fingertips—
until I dress in the heaviness,

a sarong of heat.
I'm really am quite missing Cambodia. :heart:

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Here by *TheDarkenedBride

Thank you so much! :rose:
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orayx Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013
this poem is marvelous! beautiful imagery mixed with a message that lingers.
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Concora Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013   Writer
This one is quite special to me, so I'm always overjoyed when others enjoy it too. Thanks so much! :rose:
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner May 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"for the dancers threading grace
between their fingertips"

:heart:
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Concora Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013   Writer
:huggle: :heart:
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ssensory Featured By Owner May 11, 2013   Writer
Pfft. I don't know why I didn't favorite this before.

Well, I fixed that. Fav'd it now. :heart:
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner May 11, 2013   Writer
:heart:!
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ssensory Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2013   Writer
I can't believe I never read this before...
This poem is extremely beautiful and just perfect. I can feel one of those hot and moist rainy days from this poem, which is really interesting. Beautiful imagery. You really know how to find the perfect words.
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Concora Featured By Owner May 3, 2013   Writer
Wow, thank you so much for such a lovely comment! This piece is really quite special to me, so I'm glad you like it. :heart:
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013   Writer
...for the dancers threading grace / between their fingertips-- Just those lines are very beautiful.
It's a joy to read what surrounds them as well. Thank you. :+fav:
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013   Writer
No, thank you - Cambodia is my absolute favourite place in the world; I'm so glad to know I did it some justice. :hug: :heart:
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013   Writer
You gave it "justice," and beauty, too. :heart:
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Concora Featured By Owner May 3, 2013   Writer
:heart:
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alexiscaitlinking Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Fantastic. I keep coming back to your poetry. It's imagery and emotion is phenomenal.
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Concora Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013   Writer
Oh, that is such a complement. Thank you so much. I'm thrilled you enjoy my work. :heart:
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Unpredictabloo Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013  Student General Artist
Very lovely imagery here. Short and sweet and lovely <3
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013   Writer
Thank you so much. :)
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TheSilentSerenade Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful, like all your work. I wish I could write as prolifically as you!
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Concora Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013   Writer
Thank you so much. This piece in particular is quite special to me, so it's nice to get good feedback on it! I'm glad you enjoyed. :heart:
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Pardon me for asking, but where is Apsara located?
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Concora Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013   Writer
Apsara isn't actually a place (that I know of, ha) - an Apsara is a cloud/water spirit of both Buddhist and Hindu mythology. Traditionally they appear to be quite seductive. The traditional dances of Cambodia are also often generalised into the term 'Apsara dance'; and those dancers are also referenced in this poem. They're quite beautiful to behold [link]. :)
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
wow...

oh my goodness she is lovely! :love:
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013   Writer
Indeed. :)
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oops, I am terribly sorry for the stupid question (stupid me...) I saw your artist's comment...:iconfacepalmplz:
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Adonael Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I enjoyed the use of enjambment between the first and second stanza and your use of immersive metaphors because it creates the effect of belonging.

But three faced elephants?? That one was lost on me :shrug:
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Concora Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013   Writer
Thank you. :love:

That's a reference to one of the many forms of Ganesh/Ganesha, one of the major Hindu gods. He's also worshipped in Buddhism, which is the dominant religion of Cambodia.
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Adonael Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ah yes. The memories of my old RE classes are flooding back to me now!

No worries :rose:
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013   Writer
Ah-ha! Finally, someone who can tell me what an RE class is! :lol:
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Adonael Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It stands for religious education, so your philosophy, ethics...so on :la:
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CelestialMemories Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is so unbelievably beautiful!!!

You did an amazing job!
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013   Writer
Thank you so much, lovely. :heart: I hope you've been all right?
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CelestialMemories Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are so welcome!

I have been well. Trying to enjoy the last couple weeks of break before I start my hectic second semester! :giggle:

How about you?
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013   Writer
Aah, I know that feeling! :lol: I'm doing the same - just relaxing before I throw myself into Uni. ^^
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CelestialMemories Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hahaha! You got that right!

I just got my textbook list a couple days ago x_x

7 books for one class :noes:
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Concora Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013   Writer
Ouchies. Sounds like you're in for a brutal class!

I'm still having trouble enrolling, and admin seem like a bunch of useless morons thus far. This experience is not giving me high hopes for my time at uni, hahah.
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ozzla Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012   Writer
I can see why it's been featured :heart: It's such a succinct piece with beautiful imagery that flows from one stanza to the next. Personally, it's the first and last stanza's imagery that stands out, and that's perfect because the first and last thing that is read one remembers the most.

All in all, I haven't been to Cambodia but I think I travelled there as I read your piece :D
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Concora Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013   Writer
Oh, thank you! :heart::heart:
It is SUCH a beautiful country. I'm glad I was able to to it even an ounce of justice. ^^
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
lordie, you write pictures, you know that? :heart:
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012   Writer
That is such a beautiful compliment. Thank you so much! :heart:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012
My god this is beautiful. :heart:
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Concora Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012   Writer
Oh thank you. :heart:
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dreamsinstatic Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012
Your fantastic work has been featured in Friday Night Features.
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Concora Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012   Writer
Oh, thank you! :heart:
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dreamsinstatic Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
You're welcome.
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JayaLaw Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Good to see a kindred spirit rendering Indian folklore. The apsaras were unappreciated in their time.
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Concora Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012   Writer
Indeed. They truly are a wonderful sight, though!
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JayaLaw Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Indeed; that's why they were sent to sages to interrupt their meditations. Sages got distracted by the elegant dancing.
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Concora Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013   Writer
I must say that doesn't surprise me. :lol:
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JayaLaw Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Nor me. If I recall for one story, a rakshasa princess turned herself into a beautiful apsara to court a sage, bear his children, and order them to conquer the gods. They succeeded for a short period of time. Sages are only human, I guess.
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
for the dancers threading grace
between their fingertips—
until I dress in the heaviness,

a sarong of heat.


--beautiful.
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Concora Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012   Writer
Thank you. :heart::heart:
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