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Bright-eyed,
bird-boned
whisper girl;

dark-dressed,
moon-backed
mistress of light.
Лилия / Liliya.
NaPoWriMo 11

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Thank you! :rose:
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:iconaprilwednesday:
aprilwednesday Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014   Writer
this is enchanting. it sounds like you're describing someone right out of a fairytale :heart:
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2014   Writer
Thank you very much! :hug:
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Adonael Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Using the verb 'whisper' as an adjective was a nice touch and seeing how small and fragile the poem appears, it suits the form too. Very effective.
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MrWootton Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013  Professional Writer
Agreed, I really like the first stanza concluding with that label: "whisper girl"
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BlackfireSouls Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Student General Artist
Sorry, that was twice, but at the first time I couldn't think of good words to underline my feelings towards it. Don't wonder, please :)
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BlackfireSouls Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Student General Artist
Wonderful feeling included. It makes goose-bumps in the middle part and feels warm at the beginning and at the end also mystically, perhaps because of the word moon and mistress of light. :) I like it :)
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
An intriguing snippet. :) 
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013   Writer
Thank you! :)
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Lady-Yume Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013   Writer
Hello (: I'm just stopping by to tell you that your beautiful work has been featured in my latest journal; [link] :heart:
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013   Writer
:heart:!
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is quite enchanting.
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013   Writer
Thank you very much. :heart:
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:iconblackfiresouls:
BlackfireSouls Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Student General Artist
<33333 Soooooo beautiful. It paints a picture in my head by every verse. :)
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013   Writer
:huggle: That's exactly what I was hoping for. Thank you!
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BlackfireSouls Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013  Student General Artist
You are welcome :)
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Does she know what she's made of?
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013   Writer
No, no I don't think she does.
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
If someone tries would she believe him?
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013   Writer
I don't know - maybe. I'd like to think so. :)
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Bullcross Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
God. So good this work. And, wait, where are you from? I'm Bulgarian and I see my alphabet at the description :D.

I would have given other details in the composition, but that's your work, and it's perfect
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013   Writer
Firstly, thank you so much for taking the one to read this and leave such lovely feedback. I really do appreciate it! I'm glad you like this.
You're from Bulgaria? That's super cool! :) I'm Australian, though this piece is inspired by a Russian girl I met once, which is why I added that into the description. Thank you again for reading, I'm glad you enjoyed. :thanks: :heart:
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Bullcross Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
OH, Russian, that's great! I actually study Russian and quite a few Russian girls and I can say they are all beautiful and smart and all that which matters!
Also, If you are wondering what my other comment is - it's your poem in Bulgarian, I just felt like translating it :D!
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2013   Writer
:nod: Absolutely.
Oh, that is amazing, thank you! I've never had anybody translate any of my work before. I'm glad you liked it enough to do so! :D
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Bullcross Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Светлоока,
с крехки нозе,
шептяща девойка;

тъмно облечена,
бдяна от луната
метреса на светлината.
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littlemoonboots Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
there's something about the minimalism and the choice of words that i find very beautiful and tasteful to the ears.
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013   Writer
Thank you. I'm glad the minimalism is effective. :) :heart:
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hazeltown Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh my goodness.
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013   Writer
Good goodness? Bad goodness?
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