The storm throws you to my door, drenched and bloodied, god-light dimmed. The crest of the hill is underwater. You have no boots.
Morning dawns cold, clear, a watery gold. You are gone.
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First Literature Feature!
I never do literature features as I don't know much about literature/poetry/etc so here
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The first line moves and fascinates me. I would like to know more about what happens. Consider expanding this, maybe?
There's just something about this and I really really like the title.
As is, this piece is already very strong.
I think this would make a good collab, (unfortunately I've been in a little block) or a good start to something, good on its own too.
It's lovely, as is.
Intriguing. I really like the "god-light dimmed" image. As well as the "watery gold" part. I'd love to know more about what happened to these characters.
This is such an interesting scene; in fact, I feel like it almost creates a painting of some kind (I like your use of words like 'drenched' and 'watery gold', which do make me think of paintings).
Just a few very simple lines which manage to convey a wealth of story. This is a very intriguing little snippet, you should definitely consider adding to this.
Intriguing... I like it.
This is very, very interesting. I'm wondering if you're looking to expand upon this idea....
I don't know what's going to happen with this. But thank you.