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The crying wind
brings a

deluge:

lost
and blurred at
the edges,
you

become

a
whisper.
NaPoWriMo 3

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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I suppose this poem reminds me of how painful it can be to realize that a memory of someone you hold (or held) dear is fading with time.

Lovely work.
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013   Writer
Thank you very much. I'm glad you enjoyed it - and I'm glad you think that, as the word 'mizpah' refers to the emotional bond between those separated by distance or death. So you came to quite an apt interpretation. :)
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flummo Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Student Writer
Ooh, gave me chills, that. And I love the word mizpah. :heart:
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013   Writer
Thank you! I can't think of the origin at the moment - it might be Biblical, actually - but it refers to the emotional bond between those separated by distance or death. It's a beautiful word. :love:
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flummo Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Student Writer
Yes. :heart:

I also read of this other, sorta related definition, but biblical as well, that it's a sort of goodbye without saying goodbye.
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013   Writer
That's a nice definition. And not quite so depressing.. =P
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flummo Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013  Student Writer
;)
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sherbetblooms Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
this is so perfect :heart:
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013   Writer
Thank you so much. :heart:
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BlackfireSouls Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2013  Student General Artist
Beautiful constructed words with so much meaningful thoughts coming up in my mind. :)
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013   Writer
Thank you so much! I'm glad it has that effect. :thanks: :heart:
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BlackfireSouls Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Student General Artist
:)
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013   Writer
:huggle:
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tickersymbol Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Simple yet powerful words and well constructed. :)
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013   Writer
Thank you so much for taking the time to read this, and to leave such a lovely comment. I'm glad you enjoyed this. :thanks: :heart:
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cloudrazort-shirt Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013
Wow. Amazing.
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013   Writer
Thank you so much! I'm glad you think so. :thanks: :heart:
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Atheshya Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I enjoy the simple, slightly pained and sad, image brought by this. The presentation is a good idea as well - it makes sense to me that none of the lines are especially long. I like the look of "deluge" being given its own stanza, as well. However, I am not so sure about "you" getting its own line, "become" getting its own stanza, or "a" getting its own line. Other than those concerns, I do really like this.
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013   Writer
Firstly, thank you for taking the time to read and leave a constrictive comment! It truly is appreciated, and I'm glad you like this piece. My intention with the line breaks was to retain a sense of symmetry. You're probably right about a couple of them, though, I'll definitely revise this in the next few days. Thanks again! :thanks: :heart:
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Atheshya Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Glad to know it helped!
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013   Writer
:tighthug:
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This piece has been featured in my journal: [link]
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013   Writer
Thanks! :heart:
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome ♥!
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013   Writer
[link] !!!!!!!!!!!!!
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
OH MY GOD :D THAT WAS AMAZING!
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013   Writer
I KNOW! Arya! Tyrells (Still can't believe Margaery is 31)! Sansa! Aaahhh!
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013
Elegant and such wonderful brevity
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013   Writer
Oh, woah. Thank you so much! :thanks: :heart:
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013
No, thank you for the excellent piece. :nod:
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013   Writer
You're too kind. :hug:
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013  Professional Writer
:heart:
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013   Writer
:hug:
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