The crying wind
and blurred at
I suppose this poem reminds me of how painful it can be to realize that a memory of someone you hold (or held) dear is fading with time.
Thank you very much. I'm glad you enjoyed it - and I'm glad you think that, as the word 'mizpah' refers to the emotional bond between those separated by distance or death. So you came to quite an apt interpretation.
Ooh, gave me chills, that. And I love the word mizpah.
Thank you! I can't think of the origin at the moment - it might be Biblical, actually - but it refers to the emotional bond between those separated by distance or death. It's a beautiful word.
this is so perfect
Beautiful constructed words with so much meaningful thoughts coming up in my mind.
Simple yet powerful words and well constructed.
Thank you so much for taking the time to read this, and to leave such a lovely comment. I'm glad you enjoyed this.
I enjoy the simple, slightly pained and sad, image brought by this. The presentation is a good idea as well - it makes sense to me that none of the lines are especially long. I like the look of "deluge" being given its own stanza, as well. However, I am not so sure about "you" getting its own line, "become" getting its own stanza, or "a" getting its own line. Other than those concerns, I do really like this.
Firstly, thank you for taking the time to read and leave a constrictive comment! It truly is appreciated, and I'm glad you like this piece. My intention with the line breaks was to retain a sense of symmetry. You're probably right about a couple of them, though, I'll definitely revise this in the next few days. Thanks again!
Elegant and such wonderful brevity
Oh, woah. Thank you so much!