Thank you very much. I'm glad you enjoyed it - and I'm glad you think that, as the word 'mizpah' refers to the emotional bond between those separated by distance or death. So you came to quite an apt interpretation.
I enjoy the simple, slightly pained and sad, image brought by this. The presentation is a good idea as well - it makes sense to me that none of the lines are especially long. I like the look of "deluge" being given its own stanza, as well. However, I am not so sure about "you" getting its own line, "become" getting its own stanza, or "a" getting its own line. Other than those concerns, I do really like this.
Firstly, thank you for taking the time to read and leave a constrictive comment! It truly is appreciated, and I'm glad you like this piece. My intention with the line breaks was to retain a sense of symmetry. You're probably right about a couple of them, though, I'll definitely revise this in the next few days. Thanks again!