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Red wine rambles
curdle the air, but still
you dream; half-moon
body curled in the

lamp light. I am leaving,
I am leaving, choking on
some holy word—
the floorboards creak,

a sonata for my
changeling shadow
whilst you, hair tangled upon
the pillow, are spun gold.
Learn from me, Museling. Be wiser.
NaPoWriMo #1

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archelyxs Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013
The last stanza is really beautiful. You're having an amazing napowrimo. :heart:
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013   Writer
This one is quite special to me, so I'm glad you think so. Thank you so much. :heart:
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GentlemanAnachronism Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful, lyrical, and an image that I'd paint if I had any artistic talent that way whatsoever. Brilliant piece.
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013   Writer
Oh, what a beautiful comment. Thank you so much - I'm glad you enjoyed it.
(And I hear you - sometimes I think I'd kill to be able to draw. =P)
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flummo Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Student Writer
Lovely image. :heart:
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013   Writer
:heart:
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Adonael Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I like the enjambment between the first and second stanza - how the break ended on a bit of a rhyme as well.
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013   Writer
Thank you! :)
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Adonael Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No worries :meow:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2013   General Artist
your selection of of words and your rhythm is exceptional throughout :love:
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013   Writer
Oh, thank you so much! :love:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013   General Artist
no love, thank you! :heart: :heart: :heart:
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013   Writer
:tighthug:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner May 3, 2013   General Artist
:cuddle: :heart:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013
You've been featured, love! :heart:

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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013   Writer
:heart:!
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013
Oh the rhythm. :heart: This is beautiful.
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013   Writer
Thank you so much! :thanks: :heart:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Stunning....yes, that's a good word for this. :heart:
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013   Writer
Ah, wow, thank you. :thanks: :heart:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure. :heart:
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013   Writer
:huggle:
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madameshadowenn Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Lovely :) I really enjoyed the flow of this and how you've beautifully linked all three verses. Great work!
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013   Writer
Thank you so much for taking the time to read & leave such a lovely comment. I'm glad you enjoyed this. :thanks: :heart:
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madameshadowenn Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:rose:
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wordeea Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
that first stanza really pulled me in
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013   Writer
I'm glad. :heart:
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sherbetblooms Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Perfect :heart: in love with your words.
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013   Writer
Oh, thank you so, so much. :heart:
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is fantastic. :heart:
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013   Writer
Thank you so much. :heart: That means a lot. :)
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Hanachi-Shitsukki Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful in it's simplicity ♥
A gorgeous poem, good luck on NaPoWriMo ~ !
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013   Writer
Thank you very much for taking the time to read and comment. If you're doing NaPoWriMo I wish you all the best, too. :hug:
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Phoenixin55 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Another stunning peice of art in words....
Best some-one learn the art it seems....
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013   Writer
Thank you. It means a lot that you enjoy my work. I hope you have a lovely day! :heart:
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