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Red wine rambles
curdle the air, but still
you dream; half-moon
body curled in the

lamp light. I am leaving,
I am leaving, choking on
some holy word—
the floorboards creak,

a sonata for my
changeling shadow
whilst you, hair tangled upon
the pillow, are spun gold.
Learn from me, Museling. Be wiser.
NaPoWriMo #1

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archelyxs Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013
The last stanza is really beautiful. You're having an amazing napowrimo. :heart:
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013   Writer
This one is quite special to me, so I'm glad you think so. Thank you so much. :heart:
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GentlemanAnachronism Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful, lyrical, and an image that I'd paint if I had any artistic talent that way whatsoever. Brilliant piece.
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013   Writer
Oh, what a beautiful comment. Thank you so much - I'm glad you enjoyed it.
(And I hear you - sometimes I think I'd kill to be able to draw. =P)
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flummo Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Student Writer
Lovely image. :heart:
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013   Writer
:heart:
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Adonael Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I like the enjambment between the first and second stanza - how the break ended on a bit of a rhyme as well.
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013   Writer
Thank you! :)
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Adonael Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No worries :meow:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2013   General Artist
your selection of of words and your rhythm is exceptional throughout :love:
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