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The world unfurls:

becomes a gemstone, sinking
a mirror breaking
a thousand splintering realities

and I am lost —
forgotten who I ever was,

forgotten how to breathe.

On the weekend I put myself and my little sister in a terrifically dangerous situation and almost killed us both. She's perfectly fine, but I don't think I can ever forgive myself. You can't believe how angry I am that I let something like that happen to her, but mostly I'm just tired and sore and sad. There was one particular moment whilst I was trapped underwater in which I genuinely thought "this is it" for me, and I've been catching myself thinking that it should have been. But eh, anyway.

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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This poem is beautiful. Your imagery is always so captivating.

And I realize I'm really behind on seeing this, but I do hope you're trying to forgive yourself. We all make mistakes, and the important thing is to learn from them. Not to regret them. :heart: Easier said than done, of course, but worth striving for.
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cality Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so glad you and your sister are OK, and I hope you will be able to forgive yourself at some point. Things happen, and the best thing is to learn from them. :heart:

Lovely poem, by the way. It's hard-hitting in a way that made me catch my breath. :hug:
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Concora Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014   Writer
Thank you, Steph. :heart:
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cality Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
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Pauper-Circumstance Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014
Glad to hear that you and your sister are safe. We all learn from our mistakes, and you have learned a very valuable lesson.

This is a fantastic poem. :) Well done!
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Concora Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014   Writer
That's true. Thank you very much. :hug:
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Pauper-Circumstance Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014
Most welcome!
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belcanto2 Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014
Is poem related to accident in that this is how the speaker felt at the time?  Or afterwards? Important to my take on your piece, especially the ending.   Your title suggests being  'buried' under something in a heavy duty kind of way, and I'm reading it as meant to convey a double meaning?  Fresh and striking imagery. :) (Smile)  
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Concora Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014   Writer
This is more so about how the situation was at the time. Thank you for your complements and interest. :hug:
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belcanto2 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014
Sorry. My comment sounds rather cold now.:| (Blank Stare)  I'm sure it would be difficult to re-enter this piece to make any changes given the awful circumstances involved and how you feel about what happened.  I'm liking your work from what I've read, though. If a poem evokes interest in me I tend to interact; say what I'm feeling about its effectiveness.
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