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October again;
and the curtains billow
with broken glass echoes and
Mendelssohn's bride waltzing
to better times

(ein
zwei
drei)


She becomes the rain,
and breaks her own heart as the sound
drips
right through us.
Sehnsucht
n. "The inconsolable longing in the human heart for we know not what."

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Lady-Yume Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014   Writer
This is truly beautiful :heart:
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Concora Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014   Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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RiseandBe Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
"She becomes the rain,
and breaks her own heart as the sound
drips
right through us."


Ughhh... this is so beautiful. Well done!
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BlackfireSouls Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2013  Student General Artist
This is very beautiful and sounds aesthetic. Mendelssohn's bride, is that meant as it is meant, or is it a picture for something? Is the "eins zwei drei" meant as dancing steps, because you wrote waltzing before? That was just what I imagined while reading it.
Also, I am quite curious, why you called it "Sehnsucht" as a title and also why not in english, but in german?

Maaaaaany questions, sorry :P  (Also, sorry that I've been so quiet for a long time, I haven't forgotten you, I just needed some time to work up all the deviations in my inbox and had some stressing weeks with university. :( Sorry!)
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Concora Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014   Writer
Yep, the numbering is meant be reminiscent of a waltz beat. :) And Mendelssohn's bride is more or less meant as it is, rather than as a metaphor for anything. It's just a reference to Mendelssohn's wedding march. :) As for the title, I like the word and thought the meaning fit the poem well. I don't think there is a proper English equivalent for it and if there is I don't think it would be so pretty. :P

Don't apologise, I love your comments! I hope university is more bearable for you now. :heart:
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TotallyUncreativeMe Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful :)
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Concora Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2014   Writer
Thank you! :rose:
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TotallyUncreativeMe Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
you're welcome :dalove:
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2013  Student Writer
Brilliant stuff, but I do feel that the "us" at the end kinda ruins the flow; out of the blue we go from describing and talking about it/she, then the narrator is included too... I dunno, I just feel that it doesn't fit. 
Either way, it's a beautiful piece :3
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Concora Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2014   Writer
Thank you for a constructive comment! It does interrupt the flow a bit - I'll look into some edits. :) Glad you liked it. :hug:
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Student Writer
Glad I could help :3
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weatherstained Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013  Student Digital Artist
I'm so deeply in love by your writing style
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Concora Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2013   Writer
That is very sweet of you; thanks! :heart:
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tirasunil Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013  Student Writer
This is the most beautiful thing I've read in a long time. 
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Concora Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2013   Writer
That means so much. Thank you.
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tirasunil Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2013  Student Writer
Of course. :)
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013   General Artist
You are a very pretty writer with a very pretty soul. :love:
Congratulations on the DLD! :clap:
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Concora Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013   Writer
Aww shucks. Stop it. :heart: But thank you very much. :huggle:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013   General Artist
NEVER :evillaugh:

Always, sweetheart! :tighthug:
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MehreenFreed Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
There's a lovely flow to the poem. Good piece. :star:
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Concora Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013   Writer
Thank you very much. :) :heart:
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013
congratulations on the DLD :heart:
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Concora Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013   Writer
Thank'ee! :heart::heart:
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by =DailyLitDeviations in a news article that can be found here: [link]

Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article. Keep writing and keep creating.
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Concora Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013   Writer
Oh, thank you so much! :heart::heart:
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Adonael Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
'Mendelssohn's bride waltzing
to better times'

Nice reference, although I'm not familiar with any of the music he composed unfortunately :/
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Concora Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012   Writer
Mendelssohn composed the wedding march, which is where I took the reference from - although he and his wife were apparently very happily married, so there's no further connection there. :P
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Adonael Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh right! Cool...learn something new everyday :meow:

At least he was happy :P
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Concora Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012   Writer
Haha, indeed!
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Kymira12 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is a fabulous poem and I love your title! I would say my favourite line but it is all so beautiful :aww:
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Concora Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012   Writer
Oh, thank you! :heart: Sehnsucht would have to be one of my all-time favourite words now, in any language. :)
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CelestialMemories Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I've missed your writing ;u; It's good to be back with so many pieces from you!

And this is a beautiful one to view!
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Concora Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012   Writer
Thank you so much, lovely! :huggle:
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CelestialMemories Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!
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winterkate Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Student Writer
Oh. Oh, can I steal that word? That word is lovely. As is this poem. Fantastic line breaks, brilliant diction.
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Concora Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012   Writer
Of course you may! I agree with you - it is a lovely word. Thank you for reading! :heart:
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winterkate Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Student Writer
You're really welcome - thanks for writing!
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012
very powerful :heart: german is not considered to be a very beautiful language, but it has some wonderful words. i've always loved augendblich, meaning a moment, but literally translating to eye blink x)
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Concora Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012   Writer
Oh, that's so quirky & lovely! German certainly has its moments, as with any language. Thank you very much for your comment, glad you enjoyed. :heart:
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012
you're welcome (:
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012
This is so amazing. :heart: Your talent blows me away. :eyepopping:
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Concora Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012   Writer
Oh, goodness. Thank you so much, lovely! :heart:
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012
You're so welcome..:rose:
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LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Professional Writer
Oh God this is amazing. What a wonderful word. Wish English had one.
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Concora Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012   Writer
Thank you! :rose: Yes, it is a stunning - I love finding foreign words that perfectly express things in a way English can't. :heart:
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LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Professional Writer
Yes indeed.
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
... This has so much power... So much ethereal movement in its wake... Its rare to come across a german word put to such melancholic effect...

Its nice... A reminder of the forties and fifties... Put Schiller at the back, and you've got this perfect mood-setter of a poem.

:)

You can make it better by adding a german portion to it... that would just... raise it to a whole new bar. Its that well written.
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Concora Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012   Writer
Wow, thank you so much for taking the time to read this, and to leave such lovely feedback. You've made my day a bit better!

Now that you mention it, I think a wholly German portion would work wonderfully. Maybe I'll make writing that and finding someone to translate it for me a project for the future. :)

Thank you so much, once again! :huggle:
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:) Keep writing.

Looking forward to the german version :)
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Concora Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012   Writer
:) :huggle:
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