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  some
  days I
   watch you
 rise and rage
with a new year
firework fervour–
untamed and glorious,
pulling the years together
with  a snap of  your fingers.
but some days you are languid,
stretching like the summer dusting
of freckles along your forearms, the
slumberous strands of hair shuttering
your sky-eyes from the morning light.
on these days, I think the earth spins
slower and the birds sing a little
quieter. on these days, I look
at you and I think:
sundrop.
NaNoWriMo 14
Inspired slightly by this lovely piece: [link]

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Sundrop by Concora is a fine example of how even the simplest shape can create a powerful concrete poem.  ( Featured by LiliWrites )
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Hunternif Featured By Owner 6 days ago  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Huh. neat!
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:iconblackbowfin:
BlackBowfin Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Great piece.  Congrats on the DD.  :)
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:iconpoems-about-hue:
poems-about-hue Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2015  New Deviant
wow wow wow
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purplejeans1 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
THIS IS SO BEAUTIFUL WOW
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2015   Writer
This is a terrific poem, from the words to the form. I love the last line; I think all of it is great. Thanks.
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:iconplain-rice:
plain-rice Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Clap 
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:iconwoefulwits:
WoefulWits Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2015  New Deviant Hobbyist Writer
This is fantastic! Not just the poem which is great, but the concept, the design, fitting it to the subject, being very original as well.  I wish I'd thought of something this wonderful.  You deserve the DD for sure!
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:iconstonebyrd:
StoneByrd Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
How beautiful.
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:iconlindartz:
LindArtz Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2015
This is amazing!  Congratulations on a much deserved DD! :clap:  
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TomCranham Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
the structure
and words
perfect
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:iconempellina:
empellina Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2015  Hobbyist Photographer
Beautiful, amazing, well done. :clap: Congratulations on your DD. 1116867mqqc7irpow by poisen2014  
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ShackledMuse Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD, it's well deserved!! I'm going to feature this when I'm doing my next feature update. It's beautiful and simple and striking and everything else I don't have words for...
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD! :DALove: by Ikue
Have a nice day! :love: by CookiemagiK
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:iconjade-pandora:
jade-pandora Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2015
:clap: Congratulations, dear! 
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Ripplingwaves Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2015
Amazing!
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner May 5, 2013   Writer
I have featured your lovely poem here: [link]
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner May 9, 2013   Writer
Thank you so much! :hug:
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brain-tree Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013   General Artist
This is so nice, great work :)
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013   Writer
Thank you so much - I'm glad you enjoyed! :)
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013   General Artist
goodness, how you take my breath away, jessie love! :tighthug: :heart:
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013   Writer
:huggle:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner May 3, 2013   General Artist
:love:
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:iconforestmeetwildfire:
forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, this is gorgeous. I really love the last few lines. Glad to have been an inspiration, though your formatting is way better than mine! :giggle:
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013   Writer
Thank you so much! I'm really glad you like it.
(And no, no, no, yours is wonderful)
:love:
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forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome!
:heart:
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013   Writer
:huggle:
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v-espertine Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
you're wonderful
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013   Writer
:heart:!
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:iconhaanyaan:
Haanyaan Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Student Writer
visually and literally stunning.
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013   Writer
Thank you so much! :thanks: :heart:
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:iconhaanyaan:
Haanyaan Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student Writer
you're very welcome ^^ :meow: :iconblueheartplz:
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013   Writer
:tighthug:
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:iconhaanyaan:
Haanyaan Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Student Writer
:iconaawplz:
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:iconhaanyaan:
Haanyaan Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Student Writer
literarily(??)
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:iconhaphazardmelody:
haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Gorgeous.
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013   Writer
Thank you so much. :thanks: :heart:
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vespera Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I 3rd ~ohgravity's comment
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013   Writer
Thank you. :)
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:iconflummo:
flummo Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Student Writer
Ditto *0hgravity, that's pretty much what I wanted to say. :heart:
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013   Writer
:tighthug:
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:icon0hgravity:
0hgravity Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
wow. not only is the formatting beautifully done, a pleasure to look at, but the words within are lovely.
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013   Writer
Thank you so much! :hug: :heart:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
welcome, as always ^^ I love your work.
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013   Writer
:hug:
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Cherryblossom-24 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Beutiful work
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2013   Writer
Thank you. :)
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:iconarinadadragonspeaker:
Beautiful! And the formatting is cool XD
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2013   Writer
Thank you! :huggle:
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